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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Other, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.

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Education
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 plays a vital role in individual life. In ancient times,
education
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 has been provided on the basis of gender and only males were allowed to attend
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. As time passes away females were
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 started to get an
Education
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, but that was the time Institute of
education
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 different for
both
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. After decades,
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education
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 was introduced and
both
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 the gender started imparting
education
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 in
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ommon
school
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. To elaborate the points given by different people, on separate schools or
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education
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 will describe in below paragraphs. To commence with the point of different
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 for
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 male and female is good according to some short-sighted people in reference to
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, if, they go to separate
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. they have full freedom to speak and don't have to bother about surrounding
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 girls candidate are safe in that environment. There will be fewer chances of teasing them. As the coin has two sides. It has
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 had a Difference in opinion as according to most the People
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education
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 is the best platform to impart
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.
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, the Confidence level is build up between
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 boys and girls.
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after
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,we cannot ignore the life rest of academics at that place they have to live altogether.
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, they get a Chance to develop Mutual understanding between them. They will not be shy while speaking and sharing their views. To exemplify in some cases, we have seen that husband and wife don't have a Frequent talk between them and having no Mutual understanding in between
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 due to the case of separate schooling. In conclusion,
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 the points are respected according to their functionalities while
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education
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 is popular amongst
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.
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