Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Friends
are among those individuals who can influence our lives through spending time
together and sharing our secrets with them. Nowadays some people
may think that it would be better to be alone instead
of having different friends
. But honestly, I disagree and strongly believe that we should have a friend
. A friend
who worth
it and can make our life better.
Add a missing verb
is worth
Firstly
, we can have fun together. We can go out with a friend
to have dinner, go to see movies or even play games with them which all of these help us to be happier more
than are now. Correct quantifier usage
apply
For example
, I and my friend
, Hossein who is
my best Wrong verb form
has been
friend
since my childhood, have going
to the beach every week to talk. Our conversations concern different aspects of our lives. I have a lot of fun with him and I wait all Wrong verb form
go
the
week until the weekend to go out with him. Correct article usage
apply
Consequently
, friends
know each other better since they spend time
together. As you can see, a good friend
can make you happier in many ways.
Secondly
, a good friend
can help you in tough situations. It is a well-known slang in my country that says "Good friend
is better than your siblings". Since friends
are familiar with each other problems they can help each other. For instance
, my friend
, Ali, helped me to do my university project when I was sick in my second semester. I remember he did not sleep for
all night to help me Change preposition
apply
in
that project. Change preposition
with
Therefore
, a good friend
can be very helpful to overcome
your obstacles.
Change preposition
in overcoming
In contrast
, there are some people
which they called themselves your friend
but they actually exploit you. So, when Fix the agreement mistake
friends
people
see such
things in their friendship, they prefer to be alone. Some friends
are very talkative and waste your time
with worthless subjects to such
an extent that you want to stop communicating with them. On the other hand
, there are some selfish persons who do not pay attention to your demands. So, there are good reasons that some people
prefer to be alone.
In conclusion, although
there are some reasons which may convince some people
to be alone, I strongly believe that positive
points of spending Correct article usage
the positive
time
with a friend
worth
its negative effects.Add a missing verb
are worth
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Try to elaborate more on why the positive aspects of having friends outweigh the negative aspects mentioned. Strengthening this argument can improve the overall task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, clearly stating the positions and summarizing the main points effectively.
task achievement
There are good use and explanation of personal experiences to support the arguments you make about friendship. This enhances the relevance and interest of your examples.
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