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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV .Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

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In
this
 modern era,folks are influenced by well-known
celebritie
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celebrities
celebrity
 and they are following those ideal
people
 from various means of
commucation
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communication
 like,youtube and newspaper. I reckon it is a good trend as
this
 kind of tendency among masses will result
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outcome.
First
 and foremost,each and every individual have their own types of interest and they follow those things which are done by their favourite
person
.
This
 habit makes
people
 feel more satisfied despite the character of the nature of
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ctivity. As
people
feels
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 themselves good if they are following and listening to their heart.In
this
way
,to obtain satisfaction,individuals are doing the same things which are performed by well-known
people
.There are few cases of
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apid increase in the sales of special product,which were advertised by famous actors in festival eve used to get damaged because of
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.
Secondly
,
people
 are getting motivation from the enduring suffered by
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amous
person
 to get
achievent
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achievement
achieved
 during their
life time
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 which is making common
people
to
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do
h
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ard effort.It means
,
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they are not giving up their ambitions until and unless they got it because they learn many lessons from ideal
person
 to achieve their passion.In
this
way
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consistency can be seen in many hard
worker
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 and
also
 we can
also
 notice good result in the same
way
.
For instance
,there are huge motivational videos in different platforms where
m
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the
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ost successful
person
also
 did get inspiration after
knowning
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knowing
 them through various medium. In conclusion,
people
 have
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a
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endency to go through the
way
 which famous
person
 used to go which is making them more satisfied with their performed activity and
also
 after getting knowledge from
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uccessful
person
 they are
also
 regenerating themselves towards success.
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