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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
food
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 crises are one of the major issues faced by mankind around the world and to cure
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 problem, it has been suggested by some that genetically engineered
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 is a possible solution.
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 essay disagrees with the statement to produce genetically modified
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, changing
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 genetic reduces or some time vanishes
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 and
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, these will impact the farmers
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 negatively. Nowadays, genetically changed
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 is already placed in a market and it has been speculated that these foods are not even good enough to provide the least amount of required
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,
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 method of producing
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 by modifying and original form is so that crops or vegetation grows faster due to which they lack in
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, when I was in a village, we used to get our vegetables, fruits and grains from our own farms which are grown organically were so tasty and full of
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 that after when I tried genetically modified apple, it was nothing in taste compared to the one I had in our farm. Most farmer
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 still uses organic seedling and it takes time for them to grow. While the wealthy farmer who can afford those seedlings, is able to get their
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 in the market sooner than those who still use organic seedlings, that how a wealthy farmer still away from the
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, foods with inherited genes are cheaper than organic
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 which will affect normal farmers
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 negatively. In conclusion, considering all the fact above, genetically modified foods are not a possible solution to the
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 crisis
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