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Some people think that mobile phones are harmful for children ,while other disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is argued whether is better to live in a
house
 or in an
apartment
.
This
 essay discusses the benefits and the drawbacks of living in a
house
 in comparison with living in an
apartment
 and
then
 will give its own opinion that there are more advantages to live in a
house
. On
one
 hand, there are severe reasons why is more enjoyable to live in a
house
.
Firstly
, the main
one
 is the privacy
one
 can only have at a
house
 since they are not sharing walls with neighbours and do not risk to be listened or disturbed by them, which they would if living in an
apartment
.
Secondly
, another huge merit of living in a
house
 is to have their own space for leisure,
such
 as a yard or a swimming pool, to spend with their loved ones as they will. To illustrate, many buildings have a swimming pool for their residents,
however
, they need to share it and it may become uncomfortable and not as pleasant as expected.
On the other hand
, to live in an
apartment
 has
also
 positives aspects. The principal
one
 is the sense of security of living in a building.
This
 feeling is natural due to the belief that
one
 criminal would be discouraged to try any action in a building due to the higher risk of being caught since there are more people living there if compared with a
house
. To conclude, both points of view have their merits and drawbacks.
However
, in my opinion, the advantages of living in a
house
,
such
 as to have privacy and
one
’s own space for leisure, outweigh the advantages of living in an
apartment
, like the elevated sense of security.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive screen time
  • health problems
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • disrupted sleep patterns
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • reliance
  • impair
  • social skills
  • educational tools
  • digital literacy
  • mitigated
  • parental guidance
  • safeguards
  • responsible use
  • monitored
  • development
  • benefits
  • risks
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