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Some people say that buying things which are imported other countries is better than buying local products. Discuss the both sides and give your opinion.

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It has long been a subject of discussion
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whether buying imported
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 is good or purchasing local
products
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 is better. Some people believe buying local
products
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 is good for the county, while others think imported
products
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 will be beneficial. In order to see whether the former outdo the latter, we need to look at both sides of the debate. Primarily, by buying local
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,
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 can encourage the local markets and the producers of those particular
products
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. Purchasing local
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 will boost the local economy. On the
one
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 hand, a local seller will get profits and create new jobs. On the other, local
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 will be saved from extinction. Purchasing imported
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 by ignoring local ones will make people stop producing native
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 which may lead to the extinction of the local ones. The examples of
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 seen in many
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 where few native
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 are completely vanished because of the popularity of imported ones. Admittedly, It is true that there importing goods from other
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 are popular because they are rare, but
one
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 cannot dismiss the deleterious effects associated with importing
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 from other
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. Primary
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 stems from the fact that buying imported
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 will destroy the economy of the country.
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, buying imported
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 will play a key role in geological imbalance. Not only buying imported
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 can destroy the geological cycle, but
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 affect the health of the consumers. Some food
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 which are imported from other
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 will be treated by chemicals to stay fresh for a long time. These chemicals will affect consumers health in a bad way. In conclusion, I would not wish to underestimate the popularity of imported
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.
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, I feel that the effects of encouraging imported
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 are far too great to ignore.
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