IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

pros and cons of this era as is full of daily inventions.

5.0 / 9
Band scoreView breakdown ↓
✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Introduction
Nowadays, many countries around the world are invented a new thing
in
Verify preposition usage
apply
show examples
every day. From my point of view, the advantages of daily
inventions
Use synonyms
 outweigh disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, The world that we live in today is full of daily
inventions
Use synonyms
. There are many benefits of Technology evolution.
Firstly
Linking Words
, some businesses create technological equipment in order to make
people
Use synonyms
 have more comfortable in modern society.
Secondly
Linking Words
, apparatuses have improved the quality of human
life
Use synonyms
 since they do not have any tech-products .
For instance
Linking Words
,
inventions
Use synonyms
 are very useful for
people
Use synonyms
 who know how to use it in their
life
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as when they have finished dinner, it has electrical appliances called Dishwasher, so it is very helpful and comfortable for our family that lazy to wash the dishes.
Hence
Linking Words
, some of the
inventions
Use synonyms
 have many pros to make
people
Use synonyms
life
Use synonyms
 more comfortable.
Lastly
Linking Words
, these
inventions
Use synonyms
 have made us our lives more convenient and easy.
For example
Linking Words
, smartphones and laptops that we use today have advantages
to
Verify preposition usage
for
show examples
 everyone. The applications like WhatsApp, Skype, Facebook and more help us to keep in touch with our relatives and friends
hence
Linking Words
 diminishing the long-distance relationship. The invention of LED lights helps us save electricity and monthly expenditure on the same.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some
people
Use synonyms
 believe that technological
inventions
Use synonyms
 have many drawbacks because some creations are not helping or make
p
Add an article
the
show examples
opulation in daily
life
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, more and more technological apparatuses are very expensive nowadays. it made
people
Use synonyms
 do not have much money to spend in daily
life
Use synonyms
. Because it is the most important living factors in modern
life
Use synonyms
.
Lastly
Linking Words
, living in a technologically advanced era
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 can be the over-reliance on
m
Add an article
the
show examples
achinery has made
people
Use synonyms
 lazy.
Also
Linking Words
, the employers can easily replace a hundred workers with a single machine, it has resulted in unemployment among the youth. Apart from these, it has undoubtedly brought advancements in the medical field, but nuclear weapons have
also
Linking Words
 been invented, which can eradicate the entire human race in minutes.
Conclusion
To sum up, in every country in
this
Linking Words
 era has many
inventions
Use synonyms
 to make their citizens have a good quality of
life
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, there are both benefits and drawbacks as
people
Use synonyms
 have full
inventions
Use synonyms
 in their countries.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: