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Some people think that the teenage years are happiest times of the most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Happiness
 is the ultimate goal of each individual across the globe. There are predominantly two contradicting debates are taking place as a portion of the
people
 who think that young
age
 is the happiest times of
life
, but others say that despite greater responsibilities,
adults
 are happier. In my opinion, I completely agree with the latter part of society due to the fact that
happiness
 is a feeling or emotion that comes out of satisfaction after successful completion of critical tasks. On the one hand, at a young
age
,
people
 give more preference to enjoy themselves without noticing the impact of actions to other
people
. There is a big difference between enjoyment and
happiness
. To be more precise, enjoying every instance of
life
 whether it is a success or failure is enjoyment, whereas
happiness
 is an emotion that comes out of successful instances.
For example
, some juveniles enjoy the failure of an exam without understanding their parent's effort.
Moreover
, as per statistics
happiness
 index among the teenage students is 17% less when compared to
adults
.
On the other hand
, matured persons feel responsible for their actions and feel happy when they deliver critical things in
life
 with greater efforts.
Happiness
 is an eternal emotion that
people
 try finding within themselves in several ways. In spite of greater responsibilities within their family,
adults
 find
happiness
 in helping others in hard situations.
For instance
,
Happiness
 quotient among
adults
 in India is 37% higher than the young
age
people
 as per the survey records of a renowned research institute.
Hence
, matured persons are happier with their hard work and successful
life
. To conclude, while I understand the
people
 saying that the young
age
people
 are happier, but in my opinion,
adults
 are the happiest
people
 with greater satisfaction in
life
 with their responsible actions like helping other needy
people
 with money or moral support.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adolescence
  • Vibrancy
  • Self-discovery
  • Maturation
  • Fulfillment
  • Life milestones
  • Peer pressure
  • Personal autonomy
  • Financial independence
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Nostalgia
  • Adulting
  • Quarter-life crisis
  • Midlife achievement
  • Existential satisfaction
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