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Some feel that countries should produce most of the food that is eaten in their country and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #countries #food #country #import
In today’s world
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people are more aware
about
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 their
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edacity
 rather than consuming unwanted
products
 even though, commercials do showcase a wide range of
products
 launching in the market day by day, now consumers have the source to do research about the commodity before they buy it.
However
, in olden days customers do not have access to
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the quality or performance of the product
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products
 quality or performance rather than the information the commercials provide form their flyer.
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, in the
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twenty
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first
 century
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we have high tech shops and online search engines which provide us
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all the information that we need in the tip of our hand.
For example
, we can search for review of any
products
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that
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 not edited on most of the sites which we can relay and trust.
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, broadcast
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 not have that much reach in our society
now a days
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, and it is no more a thing that audience listen to,
instead
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they have several other
medias
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 to browse when an add pop up it was not like that before.
Furthermore
, people have the option to choose
ad free
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 apps and that clearly
show
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 how much they care about promotions
now a days
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nowadays
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. In conclusion, our present era
do
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 not
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rely
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 only on brands announcement rather than consuming their needs with
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nowledge that they have access to today.
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