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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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It is very crucial for children to understand the difference between correct and wrong from an early age .
Although
 making a good judgement is a tough task and need to taught by
parents
 its make a significant change in
child
's
life
 which they learn in their adolescent years.Mild punishment which lead to a
life
 lessons can be given to the students . we live in a judgemental society where everyday we face multiple scenarios which make us question our own decisions . It is
parents
 and teachers responsibility to teach students from early days how to distinguish between wrong and right . Many
child
 can't tell the difference and became victim of something ungrateful which takes toll on their
life
 .
For instance
 may girl
child
 in india can't tell what is bad and good touch by men ,which gives the oppourtunity to vulture to perform a crime ,if
this
 had been taught in schools the no . of juvenile rape cases will be way less in
third
 developing nations. very harsh punishment
such
 as beating ,spanking, whipping make a negative impact on the pupil's mental health ,
hence
 violence is not welcome in teaching. Punishment should make the 5 year old understand what has been done wrong by him .
For example
 :- If a
child
 has beaten another
child
 at school we should call
parents
 of the
child
 and make him apologies for the wrong behaviour . In conclusion ,
Parents
 are pioneer of
child
's
life
 for few years ,
hence
 they should taught him good manners and scold if any mistakes are done by them .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • ethical decisions
  • morality
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • positive reinforcement
  • punitive measures
  • age-appropriate
  • valuable lessons
  • corrective behaviors
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