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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a persons culture and character from their choice of clothes?

#people #persons #culture #character #choice #clothes
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These days , there has been a heated argument about judging the peoples from their
clothes
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.Some
people
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 believe that you can know the persons from the dresses that they are wear while there are others who do not think that. In my own point
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view,
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 think
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 difficult to prediction one's culture only from his
clothes
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. On the one hand, the attire of a person can reflect his tradition ,religion ,and even the weather where he lives
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 is because in many countries there is a special custom for the entire
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 to wear.
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, a Muslim woman as a part of her religion she
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 to wear hijab,in order to cover her hair, which is considered an essential way to be a real
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 woman ,and
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 tradition followed in all
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 countries.
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, the dynamic peoples like to wear comfortable and loose attire,whereas, the complex ones
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are the formal outfit dress daily.
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,an individuals clothing may not always reveal the
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's culture and personality
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, in the most Arab countries teenagers are deeply engaged in the westerner fashion and lifestyle rather than their own traditional
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.
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,clothing sometimes may not manifest a person's inner self .To clarify, a lot of singers and actors may have to wear exorbitant attire on the stage ,but these
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 not reflect their actual personality . To sum up,while it is not impossible to collect accurate information about the
people
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's background via their dress ,
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 think there is a real danger to use
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 way all the time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional garments
  • Cultural background
  • Personal identity
  • Character traits
  • Social status
  • Profession
  • Subcultures
  • Conformity
  • External factors
  • Globalization
  • Fashion trends
  • Cultural identity
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