Nowadays, people have adopted an unhealthy lifestyle. Why do think this is? How could this problem be solved?

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pectrum of determining factors behind the plunging interest toward their healthy

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easy and take less time or order some junk

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trendy or to showoff people went outside and enjoy restaurant

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laziness

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human life.

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exercise

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, All these reasons bring catastrophic upshot on our health like obesity,blood pressure and many other diseases.To avoid all of

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we should change our

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pattern and

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more healthy activities like

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morning walk, get membership in

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lub, and most importantly eat unhygienic

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usy schedule but on a counterpart

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problems and involve exercise or yoga in your daily routine.

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