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Many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems can this situation cause? What are the possible solutions?

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In
this
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 century, some
people
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 try to make a
balance
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 between
work
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 and home; they want to keep their successful job and enjoy
life
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 with their
families
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.
This
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 kind of occasions leads to some mistakes and problem. In
this
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 essay,I will discuss these
problems
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 and I will suggest some solutions.
To begin
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 with, some
problems
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 may happen in
this
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 situation when
people
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 strive to keep a successful career at the same time live a happy
life
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 with their
families
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. To explain that, any employee who has a prosperous job all time-stressed because he works more time than any other and that put him in a problem with his
families
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.
For example
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, these employees were working in Wall street suffered from long
work
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 hours and all way has stress and that lead to divorce and many
problems
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 in the communities.
Thus
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, many
people
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 suffer from trying to keep successful
work
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, family
balance
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. At the same time, solutions to solve
this
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 problem mentioned above are many and I can suggest that business owners should encourage their workers to
work
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 just 8 hours every day and stay the rest of the day with their
families
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.
In other words
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, the main factor to keep the
balance
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 between a happy
life
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 and successful career is to leave the
work
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 early and make an activity with the wife, sons and daughters.
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 clear in countryside
families
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,
for instance
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, village communities till now have a stable happy
life
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 and prosperous
work
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 than who live in the city because they just
work
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 for food and family's expenses.
Therefore
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, anyone who strives to maintain a successful career should focus on the family
first
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. In conclusion,
people
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 who suffer from the
problems
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 caused by trying to make
work
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, the family
balance
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 should focus more to live a happy
life
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 and do not forget that
people
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work
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 to
life
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 happy with their family,not the opposite.

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