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Your next door owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog

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Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings, I hope
this
 letter finds you well, I am writing to you concerning a disturbing matter that happened because of your dog, and I would like to express my distress and would expect you to take my complaint into consideration.
Firstly
, your dog was barking the whole night, and its voice was too loud, since you are next door, I felt like it was barking here in my bedroom,
therefore
 it is really terrible and annoying to hear that every day.
Additionally
, it is worth mentioning that
last
 night I couldn't sleep well, and
as a result
 of that, I went to my job late,
moreover
, I missed a crucial meeting with one of my clients,
hence
 it was a disaster.
Finally
, I would like to request moving your dog away from your flat and if you keep it in the roof garden that would be nice,
furthermore
, many of our neighbours want to complain about that concerning matter too, and they have the same request. I am looking forward to your prompt action. Yours sincerely, John Adam
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter is well-structured and the issue is clearly identified, but try to use transitions between sentences and paragraphs more smoothly to enhance the flow of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of your complaint for clearer communication.
Task Achievement
You've successfully communicated the issue and its impact on you, making your letter persuasive. Consider including potential solutions or compromises to show willingness for dialogue.
Task Achievement
Maintain a formal yet polite tone throughout your letter for effective communication. Watch for informal phrases that could be viewed as less suitable in a formal letter.
Greeting and Closing
Nice use of a polite greeting and a sincere closing, setting a respectful tone for your letter.
Logical Structure
Effectively structured paragraphs with clear points made in each.
Complete Response
Directly addressing the issue and outlining its impacts makes your request reasonable and understandable.
Suitable Writing Tone
Maintaining a formal tone appropriate to the situation helps in conveying your message effectively.
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