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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this problem?

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Obesity has been a more-or-less noticeable problem over the entire course of
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modern history, yet it has not been until now when it
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 reached a dangerous level. It is obvious, of course, that the roots of
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 problem lie in low-quality meals and physical inactivity, so
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 shed some light on the main effects of overweight, including health issues and quality of life. The main reason behind obesity is inappropriate nutrition, the heritage of the fast-food cult that recently came into play. These meals are mostly composed of carbohydrates which get converted into body fat once consumed, the substance
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 extremely complicated to get rid of. Another cause of overweight
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 reduced physical mobility, is related to the rapid development of the transportation system. People simply see no reason in taking a walk in spite of having zero-effort commuting options
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, there are more and more chances that a given individual will eventually face overweight issues. One of the immediate results of obesity is major health
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 include diabetes, excessive joints stress and possible liver failure to name a few.
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 suffers in case of corpulence, as those bearing extra weight have trouble using many appliances and vehicles designed for the average-sized people. All these
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 are hard to tackle so it is better to try to avoid them in the
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odern lifestyle often leads to inadequate diet and low physical activity.
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, people gain excessive weight, facing health and welfare
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. It is considered best practice,
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balanced nutrition, as well as spend more time doing exercises in order to burn unnecessary calories and stay fit.
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