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Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays financial literacy plays a crucial part in individuals’
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 led to ongoing the bed that whether it should be included in the school curriculum as an obligatory subject. I strongly in favour of
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 idea following as they will discuss detail analysis of
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 perception. One of the important aspects to support the above position is that young students can start to plan their future.
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, they can be able to plan their retirement but estimating how many years they would have to work, how much savings they require to build a retirement fund. in the United States,almost half of the professionals fail to reach the retirement target due to lack of planning.
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, students can use
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 knowledge to navigate their potential large expenses
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 as college fees buying a home and car so, they can start contributing to their funds from early age It will implant the seed of importance of saving into their minds so later in
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 they can enjoy the fruits of compounding. Apart from future planning finance-related knowledge
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 help them in a day-to-day task in theatre stage of
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,those pupils can be able to budget their household expenses can do taxes by themselves so they will feel less burden about their finances.
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 to that by having a sound understanding of how finances work they can make an informed decision
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 as to buy a car by paying cash or to lease which insurance policies face for themselves and they can be able to find tailored investment products in the market which are aligned with their needs objectives and risk appetite. To some of the discussion,it has been clearly stated that by incorporating financial literacy as a part of the syllabus in the Junior School the undergraduate can typical many
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 policymakers should consider it on a serious note
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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