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Band 7.5

A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: ask how he or she is doing remind him/her about the book explain why you need it back Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .................,

#year #favourite #book #friend #value #grandmother #addresses
I hope you doing well. Because of hectic work, we are not meeting much and the
last
 time we met in Devarsh's birthday. Anyway, how's your work going? I expect everything will be okay in your
life
. Well, I am mailing you because suddenly I remembered one of the
book
Change to a plural noun
books
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 that I gave you about one year ago when you asked me to read something about
life
 and at that, I gave one of a
book
 called 'The Secret of
Life
'. I was looking for
this
book
 in my cupboard, but could not find it and suddenly realized that I had given you
this
book
.
This
book
 is very vital for me as it was given by my grandmother on my 18th birthday and
also
, it is the
last
 memory of my grandmother. I hope you enjoyed the
book
 and learned about the
life
. Whenever you come to meet me, please bring
this
book
 Have a great day, Ankit
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coherence cohesion
Ensure proper greetings in the letter. Start with 'Dear...' and so on.
task achievement
Watch for minor grammatical errors, such as missing 'are' in 'I hope you are doing well' or 'a book' instead of 'one of a book.'
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent tone and elaborate slightly more on your feelings and why returning the book promptly is important to you.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the purpose and makes a polite request to return the book.
coherence cohesion
The structure is generally clear with proper openings and closings.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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