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Some people think the most important skill nurses should have is having good medical knowledge. Others believe there are other more important qualities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued by many individuals that nurses should be well-versed with medical
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 others believe that they should possess other important qualities
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 medical therapies.
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 they selflessly
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 care of the
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 in their absence;
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, they need to have good medical
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.
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, a good idea of medical science will help them to assist the surgeons in complex surgeries.
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, they can check their
patients
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 in case of emergency or absence of the medical in charge.
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, as per the statistics given by the Medical Council of India, every 500
patients
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 have only 1 doctor to treat them;
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, it is very important for them to have
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good medical
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 to assist the doctors.
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sharp contrast, other qualities
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 as management, speaking skills, and a positive attitude are equally important.
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 with, the
patients
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 not only required adequate medical services but
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 required emotional support and motivation to fight the disease they
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 struggling with. To add to
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, spiritual support by the hospital staff can help the family
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bear the pain in case of any misfortunate incident.
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, technical
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 will help them to manage the number of
patients
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 in one go.
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, as per the job openings
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 the Monster job portal, 60%
hospital
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of hospital
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 requires nurses with
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technical
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To conclude
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,
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 it is good to have other skills
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 as communication and technical
knowledge
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 I agree that nurses must be well-versed with medical
knowledge
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Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea, and explain it clearly with examples. This will strengthen your argument.
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Try to add more specific examples to support each point. This will help in making your arguments clearer and more persuasive.
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The essay includes relevant points about both sides of the argument, showing a good understanding of the topic.
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A clear opinion is given at the end, which helps to conclude the discussion effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Medical knowledge
  • Diagnosing
  • Treating patients
  • Patient safety
  • Care quality
  • Informed decisions
  • Emergency situations
  • Time is of the essence
  • Communicate effectively
  • Healthcare professionals
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Empathy
  • Patient experience
  • Supportive environment
  • Healing environment
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Manage stress
  • Well-being
  • High-quality care
  • Organizational abilities
  • Multi-tasking
  • Responsibilities
  • Smooth operation
  • Healthcare services
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