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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

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Hard
work
 is
one
 of the most important
key
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 to be successful in life and due to
this
 fact , in some cultures ,
children
 are taught to try hard enough to achieve anything . In my opinion , a child should be given lessons based on how to try hard in a smarter way . The following essay will inform us about the advantages and disadvantages of giving
children
this
 message. On the
one
 hand, a child should be given knowledge on how to try hard to achieve anything.
One
 of the main advantages is that
children
 will become independent, as well as, they will not give up when they are facing some difficulties in life. To illustrate , if elders solve their problem immediately,
then
 their siblings will never know the importance of hard
work
 and how to face a difficult situation.
Additionally
, if
children
 are allowed to do cheating in the exams ,
then
 they will never experience happiness and satisfaction of achieving good marks in the exams.
On the other hand
,
one
 of the main disadvantages is that in many societies
children
 are never taught to do a strenuous job in a smarter way. To illustrate, a child is giving a lot of practice exam to clear
a
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 entrance test but he is never analyzing where he is going wrong while
practicing
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 the mock tests due
this
, in each and every test he scores low marks. To conclude , I believe that
children
 should be definitely taught to do
a
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tedious
work
 but that
work
 should be done in a smarter way.
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