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Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In today's contemporary world
people
 have so many
choices
.I totally agree with it in below mentioned following ways. In
this
 modern era, the public has many
choices
 when compared to the previous lifestyle in the early 90s .I would like to put light on a few points .
Firstly
 ,technology has improved to make life easier and convenient .
For instance
,communication has evolved from telephones to smartphones.We have multiple options even if we want to purchase a phone which includes a variety of features like camera,radio etc.
Secondly
 , the lifestyle has seen improved.
People
 are more concerned when it comes to their health It is no longer necessary to visit the clinic to measure his or her blood pressure ,diabetes.
However
,it can be measured at there homes with just a device.
lastly
 ,travelling is made so easy by introducing new transport facilities like motor vehicles ,bikes and metros.
People
 in old days were more healthy without having open
choices
.Luxury was very limited .
For example
 ,they used to work hard,walk a lot
instead
 of using transport facilities.
People
 had to go to studios to get a picture clicked.
However
, now they can click it anytime anywhere
Instead
 of
this
 limitation.Individuals were more happy and relaxed . I would conclude by saying we have currently more
choices
 but some of them can lead to a very hazardous effect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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