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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amount of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and the groom. Do you agree

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here is no doubt that several
people
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, especially in some communities like Arab, are spending excessive
resources
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 and
money
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 for their engagement. Some
people
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 believe that
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 conspicuous trend leads to many consequences that will affect them financially in the future. In my opinion, I totally agree that
people
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 should not spend huge
money
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 on weddings.
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 with, unfortunately, many
people
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 spend huge efforts and
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 for their wedding and most properly, the results of
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 trend will be reflected badly on the
groom
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 when he realized that the amount of
money
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 that spent on the engagement could be saved for his family.
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, recent research found that many persons are taking a loan from the bank just to prepare an expensive high wedding.
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 often results in a big crisis, and sometimes marriage failure as the
groom
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 started his life owning
money
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 to the bank.
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, spending high
resources
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 on a wedding arrangement have a bad impact on society. It was observed that the societies that suffer from a high percentage of divorce because of preparing high fancy marriage that needs huge
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 which increases the
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 burden on the
groom
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. BBC News reported that 10 per cent of divorce increased comparing with
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, expensive weeding has bad consequences on the community. In conclusion, several
people
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 claim that expensive weeding creates a problem, especially to the bride and
groom
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. In my opinion, weeding should be simple as much as possible to save
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 that will be required for building a family.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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