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Your Doctor Advised You that You Need to Do More Physical Exercises. Write a Letter to Your Friend Asking Him to Join You. In Your Letter, You Should Say: Why Do You Want to Do Physical Exercise? What Type of Physical Exercises You Are Planning to Do? Why Do You Want Your Friend to Join You?

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Dear David, I am writing because my doctor recently advised me to start exercising more to improve my cardiovascular health and prevent chronic issues. I am reaching out to see if you would be interested in joining me so we can build better fitness habits together! To get back in shape, I am planning to follow a balanced mix of brisk walking in the mornings and swimming. These activities fall under the WHO Guidelines on Physical Activity and Sedentary Behaviour for adults, which recommend doing 150 minutes of moderate-intensity aerobic exercise per week. I would love for you to join me because having a workout partner will help us both stay motivated and accountable. Plus, exercising is a great way to manage stress and stay
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 give us a chance to catch up regularly! Let me know if
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 sounds like something you'd be interested in and what your schedule looks like
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 week. Best, Raul

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task response
For task response: make the reason a bit more personal, not only about health.
task response
For task response: say a little more about when and where you want to exercise.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter is clear, but one idea in the middle part is a bit long. You can split it into two short parts.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: use one or two easy link words like also or so to make the flow even smoother.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task clearly.
task response
For task response: the tone is warm and right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each part has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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