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Nowadays, many people think that we should live with climate change instead of preventing it. Do you agree or not?

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In the
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,
global-warming
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global warming
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 has been
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onstant cause of concern for the world. Since everyone
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 a different perception to deal with
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 rising problem, several individual advice that one should
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adopt
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 these environmental
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instead
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 of putting efforts to protect them.
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, I have an opposite point of view. In
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 essay, we will understand the necessity of preventing the eco-system from
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changes
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, constant variations in the weather conditions can create environmental imbalance.
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 to say, the
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continuous
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 in the climate can disturb atmospheric components.
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, unexpected dryness in the winters can cause melting of snow and can lead to
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lood.
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, extreme climatic
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 can lead to depletion of natural resources.
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, sometimes the living species can not
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 to the sudden
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 and may
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loose
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 their life.
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, these conditions can cause
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xtinction of resources
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 as water and nutrition from
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oil.
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, in
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ummer season, we have observed that many water bodies like rivers and lakes become dry
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 of
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 dry weather. To conclude, since variation in the weather condition can affect the living as well as the natural resources, I disagree with the suggestion of accepting these
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 and we should
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therefore
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, take appropriate measures to protect the nature from these environmental threats.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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