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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, the number of abortions is spiking at a rapid rate. Many children are being killed before
birth
. Some groups of society believe that killing the
child
 prior to
birth
 should be legal while others do not support
this
 idea. In my opinion, abortion should be lawful as
this
 will give
parents
 a chance to make a sensible decision and save a
child
 from unwanted suffering.
However
,
this
 may
also
 lead to misuse of law which will impact gender ratio. Constructing a government passed a rule for abortion will allow the
parents
 to make the best decision before the
birth
 of a
child
.
This
 is because sometimes
parents
 are not ready to take additional responsibility for a
child
. Sometimes people already have enough on their plate and they cannot handle more.
For instance
,
parents
 may not have enough funds to support their
child
 after
birth
.
Also
, a
child
 can suffer after
birth
 if they are born against their parent's will.
Parents
 will not be able to provide the same attention and love to their
child
 if they are not happy with
this
 choice.
Therefore
, It's better to hand
this
 responsibility to
parents
.
On the other hand
, the law can be easily misused which somehow will result in gender inequality. There are many cultures in the world who prefers a male
child
 than a female
child
. They consider female gender weaker and give more priority to male.
For example
, In many parts of India,
child
-killing is reported where
parents
 have killed the
child
 in the mother's womb because they are having
f
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emale
child
. They will unethically use
this
 law to kill a female
child
 before
birth
.
Hence
, there will be more male population than female. In a nutshell, Killing of a
child
 before
birth
 has increased dramatically over time. Some people think its best idea to allow
this
 legally while some parts of society think
otherwise
. In my opinion, It should be the sole decision of
parents
 due to its benefits.
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