In today’s society, both Western medicine and traditional complementary forms of medicines’ are now widely known and used. The effectiveness of these kinds of treatment is determined by the patient’s mental attitude towards it. To what extent you agree or disagree?
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Nowadays, the usage of medicines is increasing day by day in different forms, but its result depends on illness can go far away.
patient's
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the patient's
mentally
attitude Change the word
mental
while
it could be western
and conventional Capitalize word
Western
form
.
To initiate, there are several reasons why willpower comes first before Fix the agreement mistake
forms
takes
any drugs. Wrong verb form
taking
Firstly
, people in the Yestern
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Western
had
depended on traditional drugs, Unnecessary verb
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whereas
they thought these took a long time
but gave a positive outcome. Secondly
, they were thinking
there Wrong verb form
thought
are
no side effects, Wrong verb form
were
therefore
they used it anytime when they required. For example
, if they had
a headache, most of the Wrong verb form
have
time
they Grind the Neem leaves and put it on the forehead. Consequently
, all about were their beliefs which always enhance
their confidence to fight Wrong verb form
enhanced
with
diseases.
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apply
However
, folks are using to take
western medicines as Verb problem
apply
it
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they
gives
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give
a
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result
in a short Fix the agreement mistake
results
time
while
these should always be prescribed by doctors because it is overuse is harmful and it
can make a person Correct pronoun usage
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dies
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die
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seconds. Correct article usage
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For example
, if a dose is only one pill and the patient is taking two pills at a time
, it is obviously harmful to him. Another thing is patient will power
, without Correct your spelling
willpower
will power
, nothing is possible. Correct your spelling
willpower
As a result
, it makes them as much
strong,Fix the agreement mistake
apply
Correct word choice
as
To conclude
, It is inevitable that everyone wants to
relief from diseases that's why they Change preposition
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use to
take drugs but the effectiveness of Verb problem
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mind
, builds their Correct article usage
the mind
body
strength to fight Change noun form
body's
with
illness. It can only happen if the Government should take some steps to boost the energy of society.Change preposition
apply
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