Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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many people think that the states should invest the money that they give to
artists
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in more productive areas.
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, I believe that
artists
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deserve financial aid from the
governments
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because they put a lot of effort into their work to make the whole nation proud on an international level. On the one hand, it is expected that the
governments
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would invest more
funds
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in
education
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or
health
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facility.
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is to say that,
health
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and
education
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is the primary need of human beings and without these facilities, we cannot able to survive or grow as a whole humankind civilization.
For example
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, a bill had been approved in the Pakistan assembly two years ago that government would cut the
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that they give to the
artists
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in the country and a half of that money will be spent on
education
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and the other half on
health
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.
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, I believe
artists
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must receive financial assistance from the
governments
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because they do hard work in the image creation of the country on an international level.
On the other hand
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, people who work in the entertainment industry give their all to create something special that the whole nation could be proud of on.
Artists
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in many countries do not get a lot of financial
funds
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from the government especially after their retirement.
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, a legend named Yousuf khan in India worked for the entertainment industry for over forty years has been spending a poor life since his retirement and looking for financial help from the government of India.I believe the
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should look after their heroes and give them enough means so could live a happy life in their final years. In conclusion,
although
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the states should spend a major proportion of their financial budget on
education
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and
health
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facilities,
funds
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that are given to
artists
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cannot be reduced because they are people who bring a lot of praise to the country from all around the globe.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • culture
  • creativity
  • economic growth
  • tourism
  • social development
  • personal development
  • merit
  • financial support
  • balanced
  • transparent
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