In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Discuss both the pros and cons of this trend.

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It is considered, that the advancement in technology has played a vital role in various nations in changing Pipil's addiction towards online shopping rather than shopping in physical

stores

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like groceries, electronic

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and many more.

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essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages and provide a logical conclusion on replacement in online shopping. The two main advantages of online shopping are that online shops provide a number of discounts and

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E-commerce

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stores

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give Elite services by sitting at

home

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, the online

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provide a glory of offers in the form of coins which are added to our card and letter we can redeem those points

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online

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furnish our experience with huge cut off on regular prices on occasion. Recently,

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went to a physical store to purchase some electronic

items

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but after seeing the prices and coming back to my

home

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I searched on an

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store there was a 30% discount on those

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for an upcoming festival.

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, nowadays people are been lazy because of artificial intelligence (AI) and the advancement in technology so they prefer to get things by sitting at

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, in

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era,

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provides the best service in terms of delivery, use to use websites and get multiple orders in one application

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, Foodpanda,

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is the most used application in my country for food delivery, groceries and many more things like electronic

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, there are

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some disadvantages of

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which include scams and Warranty.

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with, online retailers sometimes have greed and try to scam customers by giving cheap and quality products by charging huge amounts which really makes the worse experience for customers, even though, sometimes customers don't even receive a product after charging money online.

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, online

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most of the time

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claim the warranty of any

items

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electronic

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, and because of that Pipil's trust in online

stores

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is deceiving nowadays. In conclusion,

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there are certain disadvantages of online shopping like scams and

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Warranty

, it has an extremely positive effect on Pipil's life like receiving

items

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by sitting at

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and enjoying the number of discounts and offers. I believe that the benefits of online shopping outweigh its drawbacks.

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Effectively addresses both sides of the argument (advantages and disadvantages of online shopping), maintaining a balanced view.

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Use of personal anecdote to illustrate a point adds a relatable and persuasive element.

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The conclusion clearly summarizes the essay's main points and provides a reasoned stance, enhancing the essay's overall impact.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Your opinion

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