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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Travelling has become an inseparable part of a lot of
people
's lives. Many
people
 like to
travel
 to the common tourist destinations worldwide, whereas, many like to
travel
 to
places
 of harsh conditions. These come with its advantages and disadvantages and the essay will
further
 elaborate considering both the sides. Adventure always has it's own risks. Many tourists nowadays like to
travel
 to
places
 with extreme conditions.
This
 is because a lot of them like to experience thrill and adventure which these
places
 offer.
For instance
, the extreme cold regions of the Himalayan mountain range offer breath-taking views of snow-clad mountains and the number of tourists visiting these has gradually increased over the years. But there any many risks involved in
this
, the oxygen levels decrease dramatically as you climb these mountains.
As a result
,
people
 suffer due to low oxygen levels and there have been numerous instances where
this
 has caused disabilities and in some cases death.
On the other hand
, visiting
places
 of difficult conditions has several benefits. As cold and hot
places
 test the limits of
people
, it helps them to build more confidence in themselves and understand their
risk taking
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 capabilities. Another advantage is that, in recent times, the locals of
places
 like the arid Sahara Desert and the coldest region of Siberia in Russia have benefitted to a great extent due to more and more
people
 visiting those regions. It has helped them monetarily as they can do more business and the governments have made great efforts to boost tourism in these
places
, by promoting them on their websites and advertising on social media. To conclude,
although
 these
places
 offer extreme thrill and risks involved are very high in comparison to the usual tourist destinations, more
people
 are opting to
travel
 because they like to test their limits and explore the not so frequented
places
 in the world.
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