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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closure of the shops in cities and towns. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #closure #shops #cities #towns
Online purchasing had made a huge impact within the
last
 few years, its clearly evident that
this
 rise is definitely focusing to the end of typical markets in the urban areas.
Initially
,
people
 were not really bothered about the modern online markets, but the mass media promoted these shops into the public throughout the cyberspace within a short period of time. Since the cyberspace is a great platform for anybody to showcase anything no matter it is positive or negative, eventually,they can be reached to
people
 in different parts of the globe. On the one hand, since we do not have access to all-out local shops due to covid, some
people
 started purchasing goods online even though,they prefer offline, keeping to be safe at home.While some others eventually developed the hobby of shopping through the web. Some brands do not have offline stores in some parts of the world but they might offer worldwide shipping,
this
 catches a lot of consumers from different parts of the world because they can but the thing which is not locally available in their town through the internet.
For example
,Sephora is a famous beauty store in the US, but
this
 is only available in India through the online site,
thus
 it became exclusive and
people
 became more likely to purchase them because of the export quality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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