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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are a lot of theories about how humans can keep themselves healthy, some
people
 believe it is not important to eat healthy food or work out. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
 assessment because a good diet will prevent a lot of illnesses while
exercise
 will stop obesity. Eating healthy food is
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ery powerful tool to stop food-related diseases
such
 as heart-diseases as it is proven that consuming a lot of fats and sugar will increase the risk of getting heart attacks,
for example
, a study showed that 90% of the victims of heart attacks do not have a proper diet and they do not
exercise
 as well,
thus
 eating healthy and avoiding fast food is even more critical than obtaining medicines.
Exercise
 is the enemy of obesity as exercising every day will stop the human body from storing fats and sugar which will increase the weight of the body and it will make the person look bad that might affect the confidence of the fat
people
 and make them less productive as well as make it harder to them to move freely because of the big weight but by only doing daily one hour jogging the body will become fit and will significantly make them look better plus boosting their confidence.
For instance
, my cousin was 120kg a year ago until he started to
exercise
 in the gym for 2 hours only, now he is only 80kg and it is clear how fit and confident he is now. To conclude, as some
people
 are not supportive of dieting or exercising, all scientific researches have proven how effective and important it is so it is imperative that
people
 from all group of ages watch what they eat and work out.
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