Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers ,whereas others argue the homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

The effective education system is very crucial in
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tudent's career.While some people think that
students
should not be given
homework
,others argue that
assignments
are very imperative to bring good outcome in student's studies .
This
essay will discuss both points of views and will explain why
homework
is a major contributing factor in a
students
career.
To begin
with,it is claimed that giving
homework
is not beneficial to
students
due to extra pressure that may cause an adverse effect in
children
mental health.
Moreover
,
children
may not be able to participate in other activities that they are passionate about ,due to lack of time.
For example
,a primary class child was given
assignments
equal to
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econdary class child,the student may feel overwhelmed which may lead them to depression.
Therefore
considering the above factors ,some suggest that giving
homework
is not an effective method of the education system.
On the other hand
,it is undeniable fact that the acceptable amount of
assignments
depends on the age group will definitely play a major part in
students
score .Because
,
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some
children
may gain knowledge while they are doing additional
assignments
which helps them to improve their confidence.
For instance
,when I was studying primary school ,I was not able to obtain the proper score if I don't practice at home whereas I scored high rank after I was given additional
assignments
at home. To conclude ,as few people believed
homework
is not an effective method of
children
educational improvement and others argued that
homework
is necessary,
however
;based on the research and my personal experience,I strongly believe that teachers should give
homework
depends on the
students
mental capacity.
Submitted by Aarti Darsini on

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