Some people think that children should be raised by all the family members (e.g. Uncle, aunt and grandparents) rather than only parents. Give your opinion.

Dear Sir Petropoulos, I would like to profoundly thank your company for the decision to sponsor our
community
. I deeply appreciate your interesting to help us with children’s
sports
team for two children, or to pay for two open-air concerts. Needless to say, with your financial support for the children’s
sports
team will develop their athletic potential and will teach some values like discipline and respect. Perhaps, some of them will win competitions in the future and make us proud as a
community
. On the other hands, supporting two open-air concerts will provide happy moments for the
community
.
In addition
, the musical will offer a relaxing and entertaining moment for people of different ages, and
also
an opportunity to meet friends and hear good music. I am positive that both choices will be appreciated by the
community
.
However
, in my personal opinion, sponsor the
sports
team will be advantageous for us and for your business.
Moreover
of benefits already cited, your customers will be proud of your organization been associated with quality life,
sports
and education.
Also
, the benefits of open-air concerts will temporally, but achievements with competitions will be always remembered. Once again thank you for a commendable initiative. Yours faithfully, Alessandra Campos
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extended family
  • support
  • emotional stability
  • diverse experiences
  • perspectives
  • strong bonds
  • sense of belonging
  • multiple caregivers
  • burden
  • balanced parenting
  • find a balance
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