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in a number of countries,some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities.Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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With the appearance of high-speed
trains
, which allowed us to travel fast in cities, some people started to think we need to build fast
trains
instead
 of traditional
trains
, while others think it is unworthy and we should make our current transportation more efficient. For those people who think we should spend a large amount of money contributing fast
trains
 railway lines.
Firstly
, travel by fast
trains
 in short distances can be faster than planes, because they reduced urban moving
time
.
For example
, very fast
trains
 station can be built in the city centre, like the Hong Kong high-speed train station, which will cut the urban mover
time
 from home to stations.
Moreover
, check-in
time
 will be saved because they do not need to check the luggage. At the same
time
, other people think we should improve the current public transport rather than build a new type of railway.
For instance
, reduce the transportation
time
 of the current
airport
 by making a more efficient
airport
 landing system. Today's airports waste much
time
 waiting for the land off and land on permission, add some new
airport
 stations might solve the problem. In conclusion, both of them put forward valid views.
However
, I heavily believe we should spend money building the new railway lines, because new
airport
 stations cannot solve problems like fast transport in big closed cities, like Beijing and Tianjin.
Also
, fast
trains
 cost less fuel than planes, caused by
trains
' do not needing acceleration to land off. They are more ecological and save fuel costs in the long term.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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