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Some people think that the olympics is no longer important in the 21st century. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Some
people
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 have the opinion that the
Olympics
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 does not have any significance in the 21st
century
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. I agree with the statement that in the current
century
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 there is no place for the
Olympics
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.
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, the majority of
games
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 played in the
Olympics
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 are old-fashioned
games
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.
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, these
games
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 are not much competitive
therefore
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, a lot of
people
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 lost interest.
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, there are some
games
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 like Football and Tennis which
people
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 love to watch due to the fewer number of teams are participating in it,
therefore
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, gradually
Olympics
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 lose their importance.
For instance
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, according to the report published on the official website of the
Olympics
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, in the
last
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 10 years, the viewership of
this
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 event has been decreased by 54% which indicates that the
Olympics
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 are no more appealing to the
people
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.
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, due to advancements in technologies, online
games
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 have become more popular. A large number of
people
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 playing it on a daily basis as well as lots of online events are organizing for the online
games
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 competition.
This
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 trend is very devastating for the
Olympics
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, and in the near future, online
games
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 would easily replace the
Olympics
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.
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, a survey was published by the Game Lovers, 70% of
people
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 in Japan believe that the
Olympics
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 was the event of the previous
century
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, and it should be replaced with the game competition because
games
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 are more interesting as compare to the
Olympics
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. To conclude, I would like to reinstate that the
Olympics
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 lose its importance in
this
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century
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, and there are other alternatives which can easily replace it.
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