The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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People
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have different views about some traditional
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’s value, lifestyle and behaviour. Some of them reckon that young
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do not need to accept these
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that are not helpful. From my perspective, I tend to agree that we should accept these
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partly because some of them are useful. Admittedly, some out of fashion and harmful views hold by
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lder generation should be abandoned by young adults.
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, there is a traditional
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of gender inequality, which should be deleted in
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oung generation’s moral value.
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, in some regions of China, there is still gender discrimination on women, which may exert a deleterious impact on female victims’ mental health and growth. Definitely, as we live in a modern, open and harmonious society,
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kind of aggressive and meaningless thoughts should never be learned by the young.
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, some traditional views are meaningful and helpful since it has been tested by
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history.
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with, in some traditional cultures, they ask young
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to take their filial duties.
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thought is actually beneficial for young
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to improve their time management skills which
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vital in the modern world
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because they have to balance their time on work and family. Alternatively, the elderly might have the idea of being hostile and generous. If
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ounger generation inherited
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thinking, it would benefit their interpersonal skill and social communication, which are essential for
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modern life. In conclusion,
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some traditional
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hold by the older generation are not helpful for preparing modern lifestyles, I believe young adults should take the essence and discard the dregs as parts of those
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are truly valuable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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