Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines . Does this development bring about more advantages or disadvantages.

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that with appearing machines, which lets
people
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free more
time
for themselves.
Firstly
,
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in regard to
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manual
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.
Secondly
, the possible harmful, from using the machine will be analyzed.
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with, on the hand the majority of
people
agree that cleaning
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more
time
, сommon man doesn't have some
time
om himself to do something useful.
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nteresting book, learning
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natural science.
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ime on cleaning. and
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he doesn't even meet with his friends, but with creating modern technologies,
this
problem has been solved. Earlier We could
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a lot of
time
on cooking different dishes, but nowadays we can set up
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ask and go doing something useful.
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people
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stopped
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and lose his physical strength and activity. The productivity of
such
people
begins to decline and they get
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fatter.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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