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Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important. Describe both views and express your own opinion.

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People
 have different views about the key consideration in making
products
. Some
people
 think that durability is the main factor,while others believe that being cheap and affordable is more important. In my opinion, the cost of
products
 should be reasonable compare to their quality. On the one hand, being long-lasting is one of the main factors in making
products
.As high-quality types of
products
last
 for a long time ,the demand for buying them will decrease.
This
 reduction in the number of purchased
products
ruls
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rules
 in producing less amount of waste which has positive effects on the environment.
On the other hand
, beings cheap is the other vital factor Which is considered in manufacturing
products
 . As some
people
 struggle financially and they have difficulty in
squadering
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squandering
squaring
 large sum of money on buying high price
products
, they tend to look for the cheap ones.
This
 can help them to buy what they need with their limited budget. In my opinion,both should be considered at the same time which means the price of
products
 should be reasonable in comparison with their level of durability which means that
people
 should buy
products
 that have relatively good quality and price. In conclusion, durability and being cheap are two main
factor
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factors
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 which
are
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is
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 important for
people
 while
thay
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they
that
 want to buy
products
 . I believe
this
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these
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 two factors should be measured relatively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • durability
  • sustainability
  • longevity
  • affordability
  • consumerism
  • waste
  • environmental impact
  • value for money
  • customer satisfaction
  • brand loyalty
  • consumption
  • economic growth
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