Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Animals
, just like us, have the need to be taken good care of. They
also
have basic necessities,
such
as food and habitat. In my own opinion,
animals
must freely live where they belong, and
that is
basically, not in the zoo.
This
essay wishes to make fair points as to why
zoos
should be turned down.
Firstly
,
zoos
are rude, they deprive the
animals
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freedom to run wildly into the woods;
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would result
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a food chain interruption, which is of vital importance in balancing our ecosystem.
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,
this
will lead to hunger and
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isappearance of other
animals
in the food web.
Secondly
, having the
animals
locked in the
zoos
, sometimes causes abuses, which are way too unethical. To illustrate, some
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could be inflicting pain to elephants to perform a show, just to make tons of money. These reasons clearly portray why these precious creatures must not be locked in a zoo.
However
, some people point out that
zoos
are better animal habitat as they protect
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wild
animals
.
For example
, a Philippine eagle is kept in a cage for years, at
this
will avoid the hunters from gunning down an almost extinct
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.
In other words
,
zoos
will become the
animals
' safe haven from deplorable humans. Another point to stress is that
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some
animals
are way too dangerous if left alone in the wilds. These
animals
,
however
, can be tamed once trained around human beings,
for instance
, particular species of lions. These are the only reasons
zoos
are helpful for
animals
. Many issues have been revolving around whether
zoos
must be shut down or must be kept open. I, as a stewardess of nature, believe that
animals
must be left alone in their own habitats, where they can live naturally.
Nevertheless
, all kinds of species must receive all the care they deserve, despite their fauna.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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