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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing.

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There is a popular saying that the way one dresses will determine how one will be addressed.
This
 is because most people judge the status of others based on the way they look.
This
 leads most people to wear fashionable
clothes
 as they are seen by
other
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 as successful and happy.
Also
, the ethics of certain industry requires workers to dress in a fashionable manner.
For example
, we tend to see many musicians and customer service personnel
in expensive
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 and
colorful
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clothes
 due to the public nature of their daily life. Personally, I prefer to wear outfits that are not necessarily fashionable but presentable and functional. The is primarily due to the nature of my work as a banker as I mostly wear formal and less
colorful
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 shirts and trousers which is the norm in the banking industry. Outside of work, I prefer to shop for
clothes
 that I am likely to wear for many years without going out of
fashion
 as I am quite frugal, and I do not believe in spending too much to keep up with the latest
fashion
 trend. There is certainly nothing wrong with dressing in a fashionable manner especially when the occasion requires it.
However
, people should be mindful of the impact of following the latest
fashion
 trend as
this
 might make their wardrobe to be full of
clothes
 that may not be out of
fashion
 in a short period of time. Individuals that like to look trendy can
also
 consider buying
second
-hand
clothes
 as
this
 can help to reduce waste and save cost while
also
 looking fashionable.
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