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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion.

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According to the latest surveys, a large number of
people
 are alarmingly showing a lot of interest
in
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abroad and
preferring
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 to travel to other
countries
.
This
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illustrates
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 some valid reasons and possible outcomes.
Firstly
, why many
people
 are selecting abroad or other
countries
 ? One of the main reason is they want to discover
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ew world and different cultures. Mainly, by relocating to foreign they explore various places and locations
as well as they
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 tend to experience a lot of other cultures.
For Example
, they get an opportunity to meet
people
 from different
countries
 and make friends and learn new languages.
Secondly
,
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ajority of public want to settle overseas for their career and lifestyle. In fact, the main purpose to visit foreign is to earn more money and career growth
such
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etter lifestyle to their children in terms of education and lifestyle. While
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 many immigrants
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 to face a lot of challenges while moving to other
countries
.Especially,
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anguage barrier plays a crucial role in abroad.
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, many
people
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 difficulties while communicating with native speakers. As shown by,
the
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countries
 like Germany and China only opt to speak their native language
such
 as german and
chinese
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. Unfortunately, Culture shock
also
 plays a vital factor where it takes
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ertain time to adjust in
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ew environment or conditions. To sum up, countless
people
 are migrating to overseas and other foreign
countries
. I believe it is becoming a trend
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 as well as
s
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tatus to visit abroad.
Moreover
, it gives enriching experience to explore new places across the world and learn
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different cultures of different
countries
.
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