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Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste others think that industries are the ones causing pollution.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Pollution
 is a major issue for the world,it becomes a serious threat.A certain segment of the society believes that increasing the ratio of
cars
 in cities is the prime source of
pollution
 and waste .while,other think
industries
 are main causing of
pollution
. I would like to delve into both the arguments before forming an opinion. Due to globalisation,people become more advance ,they are using technology in their daily life routines,
such
 as
cars
 and other automobiles. Majority of individuals live and go for cities to do their job and work.so that, they are using
cars
 to travel in cities.Apart from
this
, Taxi and cabs are increasing day by day.
Thus
,
cars
 are producing unwanted smoke which creates
pollution
 and it
also
 makes some health issues. No doubt
industries
 are the backbone of every national economy it
also
 helps in the development of the country.
However
,people who are thinking about
industries
 are the cause of
pollution
. There are various kinds of
industries
 make different kinds of things
such
 as, plastic bottles,tyres,iron and many others products in which processes factories make water and air
pollution
 whilst,wastage of
industries
 create soil
pollution
Add the comma(s)
,
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for example
, plastic wastage which creates the dirty smell and people who are living around that
industries
 face many problems as well as breathing problem . We all know that, where there is a will,there is a way
also
 .
Therefore
, I would like to point out that, a human should not fully depend on automobiles ,they must try to utilise technology when it's necessary to doing work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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