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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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These days, the residential regions increasing, so the number of trash is climbing, so a group of people believe that the population who live in one district should clean their areas;
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, others think that cleaning is the
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' duty. In my opinion,
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 work is the government's responsibility;
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, when the people do
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 work,
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 can spend
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 money on other items. On the one hand, if the inhabitants clean their area by separating their garbage, not throwing out their waste, and so on, help each other to have a clean accommodation; in fact,
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 work has a lot of effect on their surroundings, doing not have bad smell and view, and aid
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 to spend not only time but
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 money on the elements that people can do.
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,
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 can invest
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 money in improving facilities that help communities to have more comfortable lives.
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, it is important that the
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 fund the cleaning of their countries and develop the equipment that encourages citizens to obey the rules of cleaning and increase the places and employees that recycle and collect garbage;
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,
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 have to teach the tourist to obey their law owing to the fact that foreign tourists have various culture.
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, in my view, cleaning is the responsibility of
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 and they have to build some factories and invest in cleaning, but in
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 way when society helps, the plan can be played better and the
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 can invest in other factors which is very good for inhabitants.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your main points. This would strengthen your argument and provide clearer evidence for your views.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph connects smoothly to the next. This will help improve the logical structure and overall flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, neatly summarizing your viewpoint and the discussion.
task achievement
The task is addressed effectively, discussing both views and stating your opinion clearly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal obligation
  • maintain cleanliness
  • foster
  • sense of community
  • responsibility
  • respect for one's environment
  • fundamentally
  • necessary resources
  • infrastructure
  • manage waste efficiently
  • enforce cleanliness regulations
  • collaborative effort
  • adhering to policies
  • taking initiative
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