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A country’s future depends on its young people. Therefore, a country should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
 argue that a
country
’s prosperity is decided by youngsters so that they should inherit more benefits. While I agree that the
country
 should focus on young
people
, it is
also
 necessary to support the other ages. On the one hand, I assume that investing money in education for the young generation is essential. It could be because there are more young
people
 studying and working in society
instead
 of elders. Those
people
 own their comprehension and skills which can produce a number of high-quality products for markets.
Additionally
, they absorb many international languages
such
 as English, German, Chinese and so on to help for trading overseas. Whereby, the growth of the Gross domestic product (GDP) accelerates over the years and brings a tableness for the
country
. Mentioning how a
country
 becomes successful with young labourers, Switzerland can be the
first
 example of a
country
 that creates a free learning environment for its citizens. The schools are free for domestic students who study and
then
 contribute their abilities to the community.
Therefore
, there will be a win-win situation for a developed
country
 and a young citizen to improve life quality in the future.
On the other hand
, I realise that the elders
also
 need to get free investment from the government because of their contribution in the past. We can not only think ahead for our benefit and forget those who used to pay a huge contribution to our life in the
last
 period.
For instance
, it is not fair if a Vietnamese soldier would not be aided by the government since he had participated in the fierce Vietnamese - American war. The soldier blood could be spilt in the war to preserve the peace for Vietnam, so
that is
 a responsibility for the Vietnamese government to take care of the soldiers. To summary, it is suitable to think of improving young
people
’s lives, in the meantime, helping other generations to adapt to a new and modern society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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