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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
Well known and celebrated personalities face unwanted attention from
media
 in their everyday
life
.
Although
people
 may argue that being famous has itʼs own price to pay, I would like to differ since they are
also
 human beings living a daily human routine
life
 and they should be treated with respect and given proper privacy. Is it the price that famous personalities should pay for being famous, or why does the
media
 give so much attention to famous
people
? If we take some examples from princess Diana to Indian actor Shah Rukh Khan, we will find that the common
people
 show a tremendous amount of interest in the celebrity way of
life
 as they may not get a chance to live the same. So, in order to gather more and more information about the celebrity lifestyle, the
media
 provides constant coverage from dawn to dusk ensuring that they can capture every available moment. Unknowingly, crossing the limit sometimes, they follow from restaurants to home, from jogging tracks to the gym and so many other places, eventually entering into their private
life
 and breaching moral and ethical standards by exposing them round the clock. The
media
 should act in a justified way regarding
this
 matter because they should not forget that celebrities are human beings and living a normal human
life
 as we all do. They are just ahead of normal
people
 for their exceptional abilities in a particular field, but
this
 does not give
media
 the right to breach someoneʼs private
life
. To conclude, we must remember that privacy is someoneʼs birthright. Myself, as a normal human being
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will never want to disclose my personal information like phone number, house address or any other confidential details to strangers. Same goes with famous personalities as well.
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