We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The use of technology helps us to work
more
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apply

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easier as a task can be completed immediately and accurate.
An adoption
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Adoption

The indefinite article, An, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun adoption in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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of technology like
I
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the

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nternet deliver so many benefits.
Hence
, I strongly agree that the usage of the
Internet
is able to provide advantages. The
Internet
had provides
s
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a

The noun phrase substantial benefit seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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ubstantial benefit because the information searching become fast and precise.
For instance
, typically
a
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apply

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university students require to use
I
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the

The noun phrase Internet seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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nternet to find
a
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the
an

The noun phrase answer seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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nswer for their assignments and without the usage of the
internet
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,

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the students may not able to obtain the best possible answer for their assignments.
In addition
,
I
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the

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nternet not only regards to find answer it
also
help
people
to conducted online meeting and online call. These approaches help
people
to manage a meeting without physically attend
to
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apply

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a meeting location.
For example
, the use of application widely known as google meeting help
people
meet
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meets

The plural verb meet does not appear to agree with the singular subject use. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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via
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apply

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online.
Besides
that, the
Internet
lead
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leads

The plural verb lead does not appear to agree with the singular subject the Internet. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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to
e
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the

The noun phrase emergence seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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mergence of online shopping.
The online
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Online

It appears that The is unnecessary in this context. Consider removing it.

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shopping
sell
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sells

The plural verb sell does not appear to agree with the singular subject The online shopping. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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everything that
provide
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provides

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more items to select and compare than a physical shop.
This
help
people
to acquire many options to purchase and execute price comparison.
On the other hand
, the
internet
allows
people
to browse news from other countries which make
people
aware
about
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of

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the current situation in that country.
For instance
, state election and financial status. The usage of the
internet
lead
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leads

The plural verb lead does not appear to agree with the singular subject usage. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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to the emergence of e-sport
such
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as

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mobile legend, which make
people
to plays with many
people
regardless of location.
In addition
,
I
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the

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nternet help
people
to acquire online education. Nowadays online education became a new norm for
people
to obtain knowledge compare than
in person
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in-person

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meeting.
This
platform opted by many knowledge
hunter
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hunters

The singular countable noun hunter follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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due to it is
a
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apply

It appears that the article a is unnecessary before the adjective fast. Consider making a change.

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fast and easy to learn
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to

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compare than the traditional approach. To conclude,
I
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the

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nternet has many advantages as it
help
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helps

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people
to gain stuff and information much easier. In future, it is expected that the
Internet
help
people
to obtain many benefits from
d
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a

The noun phrase different type seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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ifferent type of angle.
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