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Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In
this
 competitive era, education plays a vital role in
one
's life, the reason behind
this
 is a high level of competition. Some people believe that children should attend extra
classes
 or tuitions after school, while others have the opposite
view
. But I strongly agree with the
first
view
. In
this
 essay, I will sheld on both views and justify my point of
view
.
Firstly
 to support the
first
 statement, in the schools so many pupils are setting in the
class
. The teacher can't even teach every
student
 properly. The
student
 who are less attentive in the
class
, they need to understand the importance of the lesson or subject. So for
this
student
 teachers take an extra
class
 and make them understand the lesson. The subject like Mathematics, Science and History
student
 need to understand very well. For these subjects, students who are less attentive needs extra
class
 to do the score in the exam.
For instance
, From the recent studies, it is observed that 70% of pupils are getting more than 90% with help of extra
classes
. Students are learning other activities too in their spare time with the help of extra
classes
.
For example
, Other languages, new programming language, HR course, Communication skills etc. Which help them to build confidence. Whereas,
one
 the other hand some people think, extra
classes
 increases the burden on the
student
 and kill their playing time.
Moreover
, After the 8 hours, schooling children need to relax for their mental growth. Conclusion, It can be deduced that there are both sides of the above-said question.
However
, If I have to choose
one
,
then
 I believe that the
first
view
 is more effective and powerful than the
second
one
. So, I according to my experience extra
classes
 after school is helpful to improve the academic of the children's
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