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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter: describe the item explain where and when you left it say what action you would like the company to take

#item #value #train #railway #company #action
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to report my lost bag
in
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 your
train
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.
Its
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It is
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 a
medium sized
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medium-sized
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 dark brown coloured handbag embossed with
a
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the
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 brand name
of
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apply
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"Coach" with a golden metal strap. Inside, it
i
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I
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 had my library card, credit and debit card, college
I.d
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ID
 and my driving licence all under my name. There was
also
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 a little cash of 250 to 300 rupees roughly as
i
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I
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 remembered. I was travelling from south
mumbai
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Mumbai
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 to
western
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the western
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 side, approximately around 3.15pm. So
i
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I
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 guess
i
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I
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 must have lost it somewhere around 3.30 to 4.00pm. When
i
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I
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 boarded the
train
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 it was less crowded but after Andheri station
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train
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the train
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 got full and
i
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I
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was having
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had
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 a suitcase too. I think
i
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I
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 must have forgotten to carry it in the rush. I was
sitted
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sitting
 in the first
ladies
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ladies'
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 compartment in the middle part of the
train
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. I would like you to check for the bag and update me if you can find the bag
of
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this
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 description.
This
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 is my contact details 4376634556. In case,
if
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apply
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you find it please keep it safe and
i
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 will make
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the necessary
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necessary
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the necessary
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 arrangements to collect it as soon as possible
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at
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as per
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 your convenience. Thanks and regards, Bhavika Siroya
Submitted by bhavika.a.siroya on

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task achievement
Ensure consistent use of punctuation marks, especially at the beginning of sentences.
coherence cohesion
Try to use more specific time frames or exact times if possible to improve clarity.
task achievement
Clear and detailed description of the item lost.
task achievement
Polite and appropriate tone maintained throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure of the letter, with each paragraph focusing on a single idea, making it easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
Includes a proper greeting and closing, which is important in formal letter writing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable
  • distinguishing features
  • route
  • carriage
  • seat number
  • lost and found department
  • appropriate steps
  • contact information
  • swift and positive action
  • item of value
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