Some people say that all popular TV entertainment programs should aim to educate we were’s about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some individuals believe that social matters should be depicted in all
entertainment
programs on
TV
. I
am agree
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with
this
statement.
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essay will analyze
this
point of view of
people
with
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence

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Firstly
,
TV
shows should focus on societies problem and educate the
children
about the assaults in crime which can happen to them. With
entertainment
, programs skin explain that how
people
can kidnap small
children
and hold these kids should not contact any stranger
people
when they are outside of their house.
Moreover
, educating juvenile about
i
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the

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mpact of technology because these days play Thora of
children
are using phones to play video games for
l
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a

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onger period of time per day. Entertaining shows
such
as cartoon network channels can educate
children
that they should
also
focus on their study not only on video games by showing
i
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the

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mportance of
s
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tudy.
Secondly
, nowadays, many
people
are selling fake products at their stores.
TV
channels can help to figure out these issues in
the
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societies. To illustrate, in India, in 2015, the Maggie snacks were popular and were selling at
h
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a

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igher cost to
people
. Some researchers found that the Magis owners
is
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using some illegal and unhealthy food material to make Maggie.
This
was done shown in many
TV
cereals
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bowls of cereal
portions of cereal
kinds of cereal

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to aware
people
to take care
from
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these type of foods and fake products.
Furthermore
,
people
watch
TV
after a full day of their busy schedule and they need to know information about these issues in the societies which could educate folks to focus on these matters. In conclusion,
people
depict that
TV
entertainment
cereals should educate
people
about social problems which can help
people
to get rid of these issues. Many individuals and
children
face troubles every day and these could be starved if
entertainment
shows mix up some virtual reality of the society.
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