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Rich countries are getting richer while poor countries are getting poorer. What is the cause of this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Even though the
world
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 is well
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 the 21st
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century
, it is still split into a developed and
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developing nations. It is
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a
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ard truth that as years gone by,
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GDP of rich
countries
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 is getting
welthier
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wealthier
, whereas, poor
countries
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 are going deep into an economic turmoil. In
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firstly
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, I will explain how low literacy rates as
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ell lower level of higher
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 is a major reason for many 3rd would
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 having economical
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backwardness
.
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, I will
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explain
 how easy
eductaional
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educational
 well-being can lead to a revival of poor
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. It will not be an exaggeration
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 if we say 3rd
world
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 realms lags a lot behind the western
world
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 in educational competitiveness. It is the known fact that till today most of the research and
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 technologies are
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roduct of
top class
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 universities like Stanford.
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, developed
countries
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 always have an edge, when it comes to producing technologies to develop finished goods from raw material.
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 raw material is mainly imported from poverty-stricken
countries
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 with a nominal cost and sold to them
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 a higher price.
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 leads to the cycle of market exploitation, which has been amplified by globalization in
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ast few decades.
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, rich
countries
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 like the United States of America, are richer mostly because of the industrial revolution which took place in the 18th century.
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 industrial surge was fueled by breakthroughs achieved in technologies due to
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greater research, which was possible
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 of
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nvestment of these
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 in higher education access to
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ommon populace.
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, developed nations keep producing excellent skilled workforce and
entreprenurs
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entrepreneurs
.
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, since the opening of "Indian
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Institute
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 in
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ate
60's
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, India had
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 a long way in space and farm domains. India even rode an IT boom in
90's
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, which not only gave a helping hand to the state of Indian
ecomomy
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economy
, which was
destained
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 to doom at that point in time but
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 boosted the net income of different rungs of the society. To conclude, I firmly believe educational infrastructure is the key
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 the development of poorer
countries
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. These
countries
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 need to be self-reliant. An army of skilled people can make
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 is specifically important as
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 the
world
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 is moving towards the concept of industry 4.0; where all aspects of almost all organisations will be linked with technology. In my opinion
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to go from rags to riches, a country needs to create
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ducational cycle, which yields more jobs which
inturn
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in turn
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 flame more economical progress.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial assistance
  • technological assistance
  • economic gap
  • basic needs
  • healthcare
  • education
  • infrastructure
  • global stability
  • diplomatic relations
  • global cooperation
  • dependency
  • self-sufficiency
  • strings attached
  • political decisions
  • economic decisions
  • sovereignty
  • tension
  • mismanagement
  • corruption
  • intended purpose
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