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Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is an increasing tendency among developing countries to advance the economy, education and social welfare with the help from other nations. While it is considered that practical advice can determine counties’ progress, I do believe that financial resources invested by international organizations would be more effective. On the one hand, the consultation and practical aid will have
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ong-term effect on the society improvement since developed nations provide human resources and plan about the combating economic decline. In fact, people are the only source which is able to move changes. If companies and organizations involve volunteers to support poor families,
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ducation system as well as medicine, the rate of the wellbeing will be raised. A good illustration for
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 is the volunteering in the societies of Africa where independent companies try to help citizens.
In addition
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, the aid can be focused on the planning steps for
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overnment to combat issues.
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, the financial factor of the unwealthy societies cannot be ignored.
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, when
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overnment has ideas to reform the laws but does not have
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 investment
money
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 can provide the alleviating.
For example
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, foundation the factories may improve the welfare of the arear.
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, it may give employment to people who can work
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 the factory. Hired workers will be able to pay bills and taxes to invest
money
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 in the economic sphere. In conclusion, giving aid and practical opinion can ensure people with the plan to combat issues and provide human resources.
Nevertheless
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, no one help can be realized without
money
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, monetary support may have a beneficial impact on
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eedy country.

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